The Pitch
Description of the feedback from last pitch
What stood out to me as the most important part of my pitch that I needed to work on was the hook in the beginning. If I'm not able to hook my audience from the start, I won't be able to get my idea across as effectively. The feedback that surprised me the most was a comment about my flow through my ideas. The feedback that I received that was not wrong but outright silly I guess was the comment about my product being 5 stars on Yelp. I think the feedback that I found to be most useful and insightful was the comment about appearing more natural. I do feel like my pitch is a little cut and dry, but I feel like it's from doing this in the morning where I haven't reached my point of energy yet.
What did I change?
The things that I changed in this pitch was trying a new hook in the beginning. I don't know how effective it really is because I kinda just thought of it on the spot. Didn't really plan what I was going to say for the hook. It was between this one and a Taco Bell chalupa box hook. I kept the script the same but tried to be more natural. I feel like I was a little more natural in this pitch; however, I do think that I can do better.
Austin,
ReplyDeleteYou had a really good elevator pitch for this assignment. I think you did a really good job trying to sell your product, I definitely would buy if it were real. You did a great job incorporating how you changed your pitch from last time based on the feedback you received from your last pitch. I am actually jealous, I wish that I could make mine sound that natural.
Austin,
ReplyDeletenice pitch. I thought you were a lot more natural and smooth this time around.. Your cadence was great and it was not rushed, as if you were simply talking to someone in your room. The hook grabbed my attention right off the bat. I also, like that you kept the same script, but improvised on some parts like the hook and just focused on appearing more natural.
Austin,
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job in your elevator pitch. The opener catches the audience's attention very well. I think a lot of us struggled with making it seem natural which is hard when you're just speaking to a camera, but you did well in improving that in this pitch. The fact you didn't plan that hook is also impressive. Being able to improvise in a pitch is key when your working off of an actual audience.
Austin,
ReplyDeleteIt's only the second elevator pitch and it seems that you're already so much more comfortable speaking in front of the camera. I kind of want to hear the Taco Bell chalupa box hook, those things slap. Anyway, good job on keeping the rest of your pitch the same while you improved your hook. Like you said, we have more time for more improvements. Also, I get that you're referencing old comments, but it's kind of tedious for me to go look for them. If that's a requirement again, could you maybe describe them a little bit?